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Comment on First Attempt at Braided Essay by yuletide

yuletide — Thu, 14 Feb 2008 03:02:45 +0000

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Comment on Lighthouse by bgexperiments

bgexperiments — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 01:45:49 +0000

You capture a sense of how many sensory memories elude us; lighthouses quite literally stayed outside your grasp, and yet the memory of them stirs sharp questions. Lovely.

Comment on A Place by Reflection and Self-Evaluation « Ani’s Blog

Reflection and Self-Evaluation « Ani’s Blog — Sun, 10 Feb 2008 22:00:38 +0000

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Comment on “When you travel, remember that a foreign country is not designed to make you comfortable. It is designed to make its own people comfortable.” – Clifton Fadiman by acfowler

acfowler — Thu, 31 Jan 2008 16:23:45 +0000

Aneliya,

I like this piece very much. I was surprised to find though, towards the end, that the tourist is a girl!

“Taking advantage of the fact that you are a helpless foreigner who does not know HER way around the city”

I was picturing a guy all along. Very vivid descriptions and great imagery. I could really put myself into this piece. Nice use of narrative distance, too.

Comment on “When you travel, remember that a foreign country is not designed to make you comfortable. It is designed to make its own people comfortable.” – Clifton Fadiman by Reflection and Self-Evaluation « Ani’s Blog

Reflection and Self-Evaluation « Ani’s Blog — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 16:18:00 +0000

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Comment on Lightning by Reflection and Self-Evaluation « Ani’s Blog

Reflection and Self-Evaluation « Ani’s Blog — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 15:59:32 +0000

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Comment on Stretch by Cloe

Cloe — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 02:45:20 +0000

Hahaha I think we should start the day with a 20 minute energetic stretch! I like the way you said “just an extension of my night sleep.”

Comment on Cranberries by aneliyai

aneliyai — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 02:15:48 +0000

Actually, now that I read the text again, I feel weird about the entire part about my mom, because talking about your mother right after you have used some sexy, enticing language is as awkward as it can get. Thanks for drawing my attention!

Comment on Cranberries by Ashleigh

Ashleigh — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 01:17:14 +0000

I love this piece until the word ‘contrastingly’ and ‘eventually’. It breaks the beautiful, fierce words you have going in this. I think you could get rid of the word and just start with ‘My mom’ or Mom. But when you say ‘pulls a face’ I wanted to shout No! use your magical words to tell me what the face looks like. I think this is a fantastic 100 words (just with a few tweaks!) : )

Comment on Clock by jbru15

jbru15 — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 00:10:06 +0000

I think that the flow and narrative progression in this piece really mirrors the story that you’re telling. It almost seemed like I was hearing too much about your alarm clock routine, but I guess that that’s exactly the point; it’s supposed to feel excessive, almost irritating. And when you say that you “reached for it way to vehemently,” we know what is going to happen, and the final sentence, by dragging out the final action, creates that unavoidable moment of regret where you wish you hadn’t felt the previous moment’s sentiment as strongly as you had…